Fanfic Review
Apr. 16th, 2004 09:20 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
x_losIn response to this fic, Kelley Kullman and I wrote this response. It was harsh, but trust me, totally warranted.
Okay, despite having almost a nonexistant grasp of basic mechanics, spelling and any rudimentary sense of style, you have nonetheless shot out four short 'chapters' of what amounts to alomst the quintessence of excrement. While this pairing has all the structural stability of the leaning tower of Pisa, a good, or even mediocre writer, could have used some cannon support or character development to write a well planned story. Instead, you rely on the popularity of the coupple to garner reviews. The characters discover true love with all the realism of discovering a meaningful connection on MTV's Spring Break. Throwing people at each other, announcing their unsupported LURVE, and gratuitiously beating The Fat One because you are disturbed and somehow undermined as a person by his weight problem and cheese fixation is unfair. Fat people of the world need love too, but before they search for it, they should pause as a community and considder killing you. I don't support that; it is just a suggestion. One they would be wise to take. Even if I did like this pairing, I would be ashamed of this piece. Shame. SHAME!!!!!!
Okay, despite having almost a nonexistant grasp of basic mechanics, spelling and any rudimentary sense of style, you have nonetheless shot out four short 'chapters' of what amounts to alomst the quintessence of excrement. While this pairing has all the structural stability of the leaning tower of Pisa, a good, or even mediocre writer, could have used some cannon support or character development to write a well planned story. Instead, you rely on the popularity of the coupple to garner reviews. The characters discover true love with all the realism of discovering a meaningful connection on MTV's Spring Break. Throwing people at each other, announcing their unsupported LURVE, and gratuitiously beating The Fat One because you are disturbed and somehow undermined as a person by his weight problem and cheese fixation is unfair. Fat people of the world need love too, but before they search for it, they should pause as a community and considder killing you. I don't support that; it is just a suggestion. One they would be wise to take. Even if I did like this pairing, I would be ashamed of this piece. Shame. SHAME!!!!!!
